12-07-2010, 06:01 PM
Of all the stories I've read over the years, this one is still the hottest. The author does a great job starting right in the middle of the action, with Shay defeated, blindfolded, and immobilized, her arms held behind her back while different girls take turns punching her in the belly. The author does a great job describing her suffering as one punch after another (and even a knee) lands all over our heroine's belly. We can feel the delight of the gang members as they tug down Shay's shorts (to "see the target" better) and remove her bra to attack her breasts.
How did she end up in this cruel predicament? We learn that Shay tried to break into a local gang's hideout. We learn that she's an adept martial artist, and that she was almost successful in fending off a group of four girls--until she got hit in the head with a pool cue, which dazed her and made her a prime targets for the gang members.
My favorite part of the story is it has a REAL heroine, not merely a girl who submits to the punishment coming her way. It is so much sexier that we know the heroine almost beat the odds--it makes her downfall that much more enjoyable.
I always thought this story would make a great script for a live action movie. We could see the heroine entering a bar and beating the crap out of the gang members until the sucker punch, at which point the tide turns and the heroine is the one being held and punched.
Links:
http://nestoryarchive.com/showthread.php?tid=10 (part 1)
http://nestoryarchive.com/showthread.php?tid=11 (part 2)
How did she end up in this cruel predicament? We learn that Shay tried to break into a local gang's hideout. We learn that she's an adept martial artist, and that she was almost successful in fending off a group of four girls--until she got hit in the head with a pool cue, which dazed her and made her a prime targets for the gang members.
My favorite part of the story is it has a REAL heroine, not merely a girl who submits to the punishment coming her way. It is so much sexier that we know the heroine almost beat the odds--it makes her downfall that much more enjoyable.
I always thought this story would make a great script for a live action movie. We could see the heroine entering a bar and beating the crap out of the gang members until the sucker punch, at which point the tide turns and the heroine is the one being held and punched.
Links:
http://nestoryarchive.com/showthread.php?tid=10 (part 1)
http://nestoryarchive.com/showthread.php?tid=11 (part 2)